In
the evening at my campus, I was feeling exhausted and bored. My friend and I
walked through the corridor slowly. We were going back to our boarding house
after a full schedule on that day. There were a lot of seniors sitting in front
of the class. My eyes caught a guy who stood in front of the door with a white
shirt and a black trouser. His eyes looked at me too, but suddenly I bowed and
passed by. I felt really happy, he is one the God’s beautiful creatures, just
looks like one of the famous actor with a nice appearance. I thought that I was
falling in love at the first sight with him. Then, I started to think about him
almost every day.
He
is such kind of God’s beautiful creatures. He is tall and has a nice body
build. His hair is straight black. His eyes are dark brown. He has a white
complexion. He looks very sweet when he laughs, although he didn’t laugh with
me. It was a breathtaking moment when I have to walk through him in the campus.
His face successfully melts me down. He looks like a famous actor of Disney
Channel, named Zac Effron. There are so many things that make him looks like
Zac Effron. We can see it from the way he walks confidently in the campus, the
way he stares at me when I have to walk through him, the way he sits on the
waiting chair in the corridor, and also the way he poses in front of the
camera. He looks very cool and masculine.
He
has a nice appearance to compliment. He is wearing tidy clothes every day in
the campus. He loves to wear a sporty style clothes in every activity. He
always looks fresh and clean. He always brings a black rucksack. It makes him
looks like the coolest boy in the campus.
I
try to find some information about him because, I don’t know his name and where
he comes from. Spontaneously, I put much attention to him. He just likes a
prince that sent from above for me.
His
Zac’s face amazes me so much. He is the only guy who successfully attracts me
by his appearance. In short, it makes me become more curious about him. I wish
that I could know him much better.
hay yanti. i'm sorry to comment in this story too.
ReplyDeletei'm just curious about your adorable senior. hahah :D
yanti, your writing is good as always but when i read your story i didn't find the thesis statement. you make the thesis statement in 3 sentences. Based on what Mrs. diah said in my notebook, the thesis statement should be in 1 sentence.
hopefully it can help :) good luck :)
Hello yanti,, it's such a great moment when we can meet someone's to admire. wkwkwk
ReplyDeleteoverall, i think it's nice to read your writing. I just wanna ask you a little question, what does it mean by the sentence "He just likes a prince tat sent from above for me"?
Well, in Indonesia it is common to say "dari Yang di-Atas" thing, but I am not sure about the English people. are you sure that they use that term as well?
Great work Yanti. keep writing now on.. :D